The Maiden

[Berwick Bay]

The Maiden

Central America is her home.
Like Venus,
Transported across the sea
At wave's surface, in the foam,
She moves North.

Growing girl, vivacious and small,
But isn't this Andrea's child?
See her now
Firm and beautiful and tall.
From the foam,
Rising gracefully, with intent
She strides across the Gulf
Center of attention,
Focus of all.

A dancer, she pirouettes
Before floating across western waters.
Standing on her toes
She lifts herself from the waters
From the foam.
Now with arms at her side
She winds up, stretches higher
And presents herself.

Beautiful maiden,
Flirtatious and free,
Innocent of her power, her fire.
Some look at her with greed,
And most with naked fear and desire.
Chantal so misunderstood,
Come to these marshy brown
Western coasts,
Come here.

Across that stage
Where others have walked
Claudette, Camille and Carla,
Look at Chantal, more lovely than all.
Blushing, virginal,
Like a very young bride
In June.
Summer goddess,
Let us admire your beauty
And youth.
Allow me please
Like a friend and lover,
To walk with you
Across those western waters.
Respectfully,
To take your hand
To consummate this season,
So that all is done rightly
That we may be blessed,
By your offering.

[mnjb28]

Very nice...

[punkyg]

I thought is was nice, but also weird please don't kick my butt.

[Berwick Bay]

No problem. I guess it could sound a "little weird". Thanks anyway for reading and responding. I guess one possible discrepancy in the poem. I mention small and tall at the same time. Could've done that better. I believe that Chantal will be a small-sized storm, but perhaps more intense than one might expect for June. Thus tall, in the sense of cloud tops.

[JonathanBelles]

This was more upwelling, not mysterious, but rather foggy or murky. Still predictive. Not an active poem, but almost a calming poem, but still on alert. Quite lovely. I enjoyed it.

[hawkeh]

I like you BB but shouldn't these poems really go in the off topic section?

[Berwick Bay]

I hear you. One of the mods yesterday suggested in a really polite manner, that once the season became more active "not quiet" I believe were the words, that my poem should go over there. Thats okay. I think I'm sort of coming to an end anyway as far these tropical poems go. (Hey, I like that, tropical poems). But one other thing. I am stating a few "beliefs" of mine relevant to the next storm. The poem is calling for a Gulf storm to move from the general direction of Central America (thats pretty much what I've been saying through my more orthodox posts). Also, the poem mentions a system of small size, but perhaps tall, referring to a storm perhaps more intense than some would expect for June. (Reaching Higher). For the first time, I also go further as far as a possible direction for any Mid-June storm which should appear in the W-Central Gulf. I mention "brown marshy coasts". I let that line stand on its own. One other thing. I want to start writing about other topics. I think I could. This whole experience has taught me a lot. To write about something, you have to love it (As I have loved tropical weather). It makes the writing come more easily, naturally. I also have no illusions about having any talent. But like anything else it takes work. I plan on developing any abilities I have in this area.

[windycity]

Berwick, I'm telling you, you have so much talent you really need to see what you can do to market your work. I'm a professional artist and i would love to also have your talent. Your's is the perfect combination for sucess, passion for writing and passion for storms. How cool!!! Why not submitt some of your poems to one of the national contests on the internet? Check em out, you could win alot of money and get some exposture!!

[Jagno]

Berwick;
I read this the same hour it was posted and it made me very nervous so I didn't respond. I thought maybe I was just reading too much between the lines but it's apparent that I caught on to what you were saying in terms of strength and possible direction. As for strength I pray that the 3 storms you associate the future Chantal with are no where near the mark for anyone in her path. The one thing I didn't comprehend was the" She moves North", "marshy brown" and "Western coasts" in the same statement. North (given the coordinates) and marshy brown generally describes Louisiana yet Camille hit at the mouth of the Mississippi near Bay St. Louis, Mississippi, Hurricane Claudette made landfall along the middle Texas coast near Port O'Connor and Hurricane Carla hit the Texas coast near Galveston. Is this your preliminary "cone"? Your writings are absolutely beautiful and whether it's posted in tropics or off topic I will continue to read them. Your the only person I know that could make such a destructive force seem so radiant and beautiful.

[Starburst]

I agree beautiful and erie all in one. I also vote that his poems be posted in this tropics forum as they do pertain to the tropics. His precognitions of tropical development and landfall are 100% accurate this year so far. If his visions are better expressed in poetry so be it. After all is it not better to have foresight instead of hindsight when it comes to the tropics?

[JtSmarts]

Great job, Berwick Bay. You have a way with words, and this is such a unique way to show your thoughts on future storms. I look forward to reading more poems in the future.

[Aslkahuna]

Someone also knows something about Pagan Mythology.

Steve

[angelwing]

Lovely poem, first thing that hit me was Venus when I was reading it before I took it for the tropical aspect. Very very calming even though it's describing a tropical force.